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Post by Deleted on Jan 1, 2016 11:35:44 GMT -6
I just got through the second chapter. Doctor Claw is more of a bastard in this version, and poor Gadget. Yeah. I'm heavily influenced by horror author Dean Koontz, and I guess it's showing. Some people try to make The story more serious by making Gadget all dark and brooding. I prefer to leave Gadget his dim, cheerful self. Instead, I make Claw an even more sadistic, twisted monster.
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Post by Deleted on Feb 1, 2016 6:55:59 GMT -6
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Post by gizmo2015 on Feb 1, 2016 8:38:33 GMT -6
sweet
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Post by Systemcat on Feb 1, 2016 16:43:19 GMT -6
( This would have been posted much earlier today if not for an internet black out. )
Does this version of Brain have anthro characteristics beyond his intelligence? I ask that because of the salute.
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Post by gizmo2015 on Feb 1, 2016 16:52:31 GMT -6
I am liking this story quite well. Looking forward to seeing more.
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Post by Deleted on Feb 1, 2016 17:26:54 GMT -6
( This would have been posted much earlier today if not for an internet black out. ) Does this version of Brain have anthro characteristics beyond his intelligence? I ask that because of the salute. Sort of. The way I imagine it is that, due to genetic tampering, he can switch between bipedal and quadrupedal. Anytime he is mentioned as doing something more human like, it's because he has switched to bipedal. This will be noticed in ReInitiated.
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Post by Deleted on Feb 1, 2016 17:27:11 GMT -6
I am liking this story quite well. Looking forward to seeing more. I'm very glad.
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Post by gizmo2015 on Feb 1, 2016 17:31:21 GMT -6
let me know when the next page is up.
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Post by Deleted on Feb 1, 2016 17:33:25 GMT -6
let me know when the next page is up. That would be March 1st.
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Post by gizmo2015 on Feb 1, 2016 17:35:39 GMT -6
sweet
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Post by blueowl98 on Feb 1, 2016 17:55:07 GMT -6
let me know when the next page is up. That would be March 1st. I loved it! I have fanfiction too, but I'm afraid mine isn't as good, I'm not a very good writer.
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Post by Deleted on Feb 1, 2016 18:19:34 GMT -6
I loved it! I have fanfiction too, but I'm afraid mine isn't as good, I'm not a very good writer. Practice makes perfect! I've been writing for a while. Just keep practicing, and you'll reach a point where you're comfortable.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 1, 2016 7:32:11 GMT -6
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Post by Systemcat on Mar 1, 2016 10:30:48 GMT -6
I just got through the final chapter and have left a review on FF.net over it. But as you've noticed before, I always divide my reviews of your work in half. Part of that left here. What I didn't say over there was something that made me want to laugh. When you wrote Dr. Claw's psychical status explanation, that's what had me. An odd twist of direction I had once through to take in writing. Where as you wrote this happening in the end, I wrote it happening in the beginning of the third story. You choose to use Dr. Spectrum in yours where I had strongly considered using him since for name sake in the beginning of FOH it seemed highly fitting with the disappearance of the Scolex agents. And well you know I later brought him in early on with Iron and Steel, but I think you get why I find it funny. Also when will the second story start getting posted? I am sorry if I don't see it when it's posted if that happens between the 2rd-15th this month.
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Post by eyesofthephasm on Mar 1, 2016 10:56:19 GMT -6
This story was amazing! Nice work! I left a review on fanfiction.net! I'll be looking forward to your next one!
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