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Post by Deleted on Mar 27, 2016 7:58:44 GMT -6
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Post by Systemcat on Mar 27, 2016 9:38:43 GMT -6
Ok, this time I know I was logged in when writing my review over there ... I just wonder now if the miss-ID to mobile input might be causing a problem.
Now for my thoughts here.
At first I was thinking to ask if Penny having a nightmare over her parents death came influenced from another story till I realized it physiologically just made sense. That others would think of it happening to her. Your imagery was very different and fit well as to what happened in this version. The length of the chapter was a surprise along with it's setting. Like in the first you made some real noticeable gaps of time happen over the course of the story. This story is happening shortly after the first.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 27, 2016 11:29:38 GMT -6
Ok, this time I know I was logged in when writing my review over there ... I just wonder now if the miss-ID to mobile input might be causing a problem. Now for my thoughts here. At first I was thinking to ask if Penny having a nightmare over her parents death came influenced from another story till I realized it physiologically just made sense. That others would think of it happening to her. Your imagery was very different and fit well as to what happened in this version. The length of the chapter was a surprise along with it's setting. Like in the first you made some real noticeable gaps of time happen over the course of the story. This story is happening shortly after the first. With Penny's dream, I was going for a look into how a small child would interpret such a traumatic event. I've already mentioned that Penny sees Claw as more monster than man, and his appearance in her nightmare emphasized that. As for the time length, this story is mostly fluff, so I didn't lengthen it as must as I did the others. It is probably the least important to understanding backstory, but it still does help.
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Post by gadgetfan86 on Mar 27, 2016 15:45:30 GMT -6
Great fic cool job with penny nightmare yeah I wouldn't be suprized if penny has nightmares penny intereaction with brain and gadget were really cute
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Post by Deleted on Mar 27, 2016 17:50:42 GMT -6
Great fic cool job with penny nightmare yeah I wouldn't be suprized if penny has nightmares penny intereaction with brain and gadget were really cute I'm glad you enjoyed it! This fic is devoted to Penny's response to all the happenings around her, so there will be more like this coming.
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Post by eyesofthephasm on Mar 28, 2016 6:53:13 GMT -6
I actually read this yesterday morning, but I was just so busy with Easter stuff going on, I didn't get a chance to leave a reply. First off, I really like it already! The whole dream sequence, was fantastic! I can totally see Penny having nightmares, over what she has gone through. The inner actions between Gadget and Penny, are very touching. It's funny, I was actually in the middle of writing a short story called 'Thunderstorm'. Which is very similar to what I just read here! I don't know if I should finish though, I don't want others to think I was trying to copy! It's just an uncanny coincidence. I just don't know now though. Anyhow, I'm hooked! And waiting to see where this goes!
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Post by Deleted on Mar 28, 2016 12:12:44 GMT -6
I actually read this yesterday morning, but I was just so busy with Easter stuff going on, I didn't get a chance to leave a reply. First off, I really like it already! The whole dream sequence, was fantastic! I can totally see Penny having nightmares, over what she has gone through. The inner actions between Gadget and Penny, are very touching. It's funny, I was actually in the middle of writing a short story called 'Thunderstorm'. Which is very similar to what I just read here! I don't know if I should finish though, I don't want others to think I was trying to copy! It's just an uncanny coincidence. I just don't know now though. Anyhow, I'm hooked! And waiting to see where this goes! I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it! Don't worry about trouble with leaving a comment. Honestly, when I first saw this comment, I was busy, which is why it took a while to get this up. All that matters is that you did leave feedback, which I always enjoy. As for your story, I say finish it and put it up, if you feel it's quality. People are bound to get the same idea sometimes, and as long as you didn't get the idea right after reading mine, or the similarity is an extremely small detail, I wouldn't hold it against you. I've had a similar experiace with an upcoming Kirby chapter. Besides, even though yours and my Gadgets are from different universes, they are both pretty much the same man, and there are bound to be similarities. What I'm saying is, go for it, and if anyone thinks you're ripping me off, you can direct them to this post. Good luck with your story!
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Post by eyesofthephasm on Mar 28, 2016 13:56:29 GMT -6
I actually read this yesterday morning, but I was just so busy with Easter stuff going on, I didn't get a chance to leave a reply. First off, I really like it already! The whole dream sequence, was fantastic! I can totally see Penny having nightmares, over what she has gone through. The inner actions between Gadget and Penny, are very touching. It's funny, I was actually in the middle of writing a short story called 'Thunderstorm'. Which is very similar to what I just read here! I don't know if I should finish though, I don't want others to think I was trying to copy! It's just an uncanny coincidence. I just don't know now though. Anyhow, I'm hooked! And waiting to see where this goes! I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it! Don't worry about trouble with leaving a comment. Honestly, when I first saw this comment, I was busy, which is why it took a while to get this up. All that matters is that you did leave feedback, which I always enjoy. As for your story, I say finish it and put it up, if you feel it's quality. People are bound to get the same idea sometimes, and as long as you didn't get the idea right after reading mine, or the similarity is an extremely small detail, I wouldn't hold it against you. I've had a similar experiace with an upcoming Kirby chapter. Besides, even though yours and my Gadgets are from different universes, they are both pretty much the same man, and there are bound to be similarities. What I'm saying is, go for it, and if anyone thinks you're ripping me off, you can direct them to this post. Good luck with your story! Thanks! Maybe I will finish it. But I really need to finish up 'Rosebud', first. Been meaning to finish that up, but I kept putting it off. And your right, there's bound to be similarities when it comes to fan fictions. I guess I'm just on the same wavelength as you, at times! And yes, I had already started my other story, before I even read this. But I think it's cool, that other's think the same way! But all in all, I'm really looking forward to your current project and can't wait to see what happens next!
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Post by Systemcat on Mar 28, 2016 14:40:50 GMT -6
I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it! Don't worry about trouble with leaving a comment. Honestly, when I first saw this comment, I was busy, which is why it took a while to get this up. All that matters is that you did leave feedback, which I always enjoy. As for your story, I say finish it and put it up, if you feel it's quality. People are bound to get the same idea sometimes, and as long as you didn't get the idea right after reading mine, or the similarity is an extremely small detail, I wouldn't hold it against you. I've had a similar experiace with an upcoming Kirby chapter. Besides, even though yours and my Gadgets are from different universes, they are both pretty much the same man, and there are bound to be similarities. What I'm saying is, go for it, and if anyone thinks you're ripping me off, you can direct them to this post. Good luck with your story! Thanks! Maybe I will finish it. But I really need to finish up 'Rosebud', first. Been meaning to finish that up, but I kept putting it off. And your right, there's bound to be similarities when it comes to fan fictions. I guess I'm just on the same wavelength as you, at times! And yes, I had already started my other story, before I even read this. But I think it's cool, that other's think the same way! But all in all, I'm really looking forward to your current project and can't wait to see what happens next! And one other ( wavelength ). Phasm I don't know how to reply here. But I do think it will be interesting to read your take too. I know you don't know why I'm talking this way having only read story 1.
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Post by eyesofthephasm on Mar 28, 2016 15:53:27 GMT -6
Thanks! Maybe I will finish it. But I really need to finish up 'Rosebud', first. Been meaning to finish that up, but I kept putting it off. And your right, there's bound to be similarities when it comes to fan fictions. I guess I'm just on the same wavelength as you, at times! And yes, I had already started my other story, before I even read this. But I think it's cool, that other's think the same way! But all in all, I'm really looking forward to your current project and can't wait to see what happens next! And one other ( wavelength ). Phasm I don't know how to reply here. But I do think it will be interesting to read your take too. I know you don't know why I'm talking this way having only read story 1. No, I get it! Thanks Cat! I mean that! It's a good feeling, knowing you and others at least enjoy what I write. When I 'do' write that is! So thank you!
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Post by Deleted on Apr 1, 2016 5:17:17 GMT -6
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Post by eyesofthephasm on Apr 1, 2016 13:50:34 GMT -6
Just read your chapter and I loved it! I can totally seeing child services getting involved. And at multiple times throughout her young life! Cause there will always be someone out there that is going to see him as,(what was already said) a monster. Not human, he's government property now..blah,blah,blah!! That's going to be an on going battle. It's a shame, you can do so many good things in the world, but people only tend to remember the negative!...And that's going to speak volumes when it comes to Gadget. After all it's even in his name! And that's all a lot of them are going to see! Poor Penny! The sweet little thing was just trying to protect him! You really can't blame her for feeling that way! And Gadget doesn't have the luxury to get pissed off! It would only confirm those accusations against him! Anyway! Can't wait until your next installment! Keep up the good work!
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Post by Deleted on Apr 1, 2016 15:16:15 GMT -6
Just read your chapter and I loved it! I can totally seeing child services getting involved. And at multiple times throughout her young life! Cause there will always be someone out there that is going to see him as,(what was already said) a monster. Not human, he's government property now..blah,blah,blah!! That's going to be an on going battle. It's a shame, you can do so many good things in the world, but people only tend to remember the negative!...And that's going to speak volumes when it comes to Gadget. After all it's even in his name! And that's all a lot of them are going to see! Poor Penny! The sweet little thing was just trying to protect him! You really can't blame her for feeling that way! And Gadget doesn't have the luxury to get pissed off! It would only confirm those accusations against him! Anyway! Can't wait until your next installment! Keep up the good work! Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Yeah, there's always going to be someone or other who's going to want to think negatively about everyone, especially heroes. They don't want to try to be exceptional or heroic, so they try to tear down people who are. It's sad that happens, even in real life. I read a story about a boy who, while in school, punched a bully who was beating a blind classmate, and HE got punished! It's sad things like that happen. And trust me, this is far from the last time the Gadget clan is going to have to deal with this. Don't worry, the next and final installment will be up next week. Then, the series proper will start in May.
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Post by eyesofthephasm on Apr 1, 2016 15:38:33 GMT -6
Just read your chapter and I loved it! I can totally seeing child services getting involved. And at multiple times throughout her young life! Cause there will always be someone out there that is going to see him as,(what was already said) a monster. Not human, he's government property now..blah,blah,blah!! That's going to be an on going battle. It's a shame, you can do so many good things in the world, but people only tend to remember the negative!...And that's going to speak volumes when it comes to Gadget. After all it's even in his name! And that's all a lot of them are going to see! Poor Penny! The sweet little thing was just trying to protect him! You really can't blame her for feeling that way! And Gadget doesn't have the luxury to get pissed off! It would only confirm those accusations against him! Anyway! Can't wait until your next installment! Keep up the good work! Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Yeah, there's always going to be someone or other who's going to want to think negatively about everyone, especially heroes. They don't want to try to be exceptional or heroic, so they try to tear down people who are. It's sad that happens, even in real life. I read a story about a boy who, while in school, punched a bully who was beating a blind classmate, and HE got punished! It's sad things like that happen. And trust me, this is far from the last time the Gadget clan is going to have to deal with this. Don't worry, the next and final installment will be up next week. Then, the series proper will start in May. Your welcome! And yes, I know that story! I saw it on YouTube. So messed up! I'm so looking forward to the start of the series! And of course the final installment of this one!
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Post by Systemcat on Apr 1, 2016 18:26:18 GMT -6
I think you tackled that subject very well of custody handling over Penny. Her viewpoint, Gadget's viewpoint, .. Mrs. Nesbit .. piss off lady. ( Yeah, not John's vocalized words, but I could almost picture him thinking that. )
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